Open Letter to The Author
Okay. Whoever is writing this stuff, please stop it. It’s bad enough that whenever there’s more than one possible outcome you’re picking the least likely or the one that’s most likely to be mistaken for a bad parody plot. At least pay attention to your damn character names.
Take the latest sub-plot (please). Who in their right mind would ever believe someone named “Reality Winner” would do anything significant (such as, you know, exist, much less what she’s alleged to have done). I’d get torn to pieces for that, but you seem to think you can just write it in and nobody will even care.
Maybe not many of your readers or your unfortunate cast will care, but I sure do.
Then there’s that whole War on Terror plot line, which isn’t so much a plot at this point as a freaking distraction. Seriously. It seems like any time you get bored, you get some murdering Rif or one of his friends to blow himself up, or drive a truck into a crowd or something equally inane.
If you had competent players instead of comic relief in the leading roles it probably would help to raise tension (except tension is already quite high enough, thank you very much), but instead it feels like you’re just trying to distract from the way you’ve only got one lead character with any depth, and you cast him as the antagonist in the part you’re letting us see.
It doesn’t help that you’re tying back every lunatic’s efforts over here to the one competent character and turning him into a Machiavellian puppet-master that’s frankly way over the top, and then to fight him you’ve got the blundering comic relief with a heart of tarnished semi-precious metal. It’s been done, and you haven’t even put an individual spin on it. It reads like you’re just going through the motions.
You’re going to pull another Deus Ex Machina out of your anatomy, aren’t you? You’re just waiting to throw in some ridiculously improbable event and sit back and smirk at us while we try to figure out how to deal with it.