You know how it is… you’re cruising along, cranking out the prose, and then you pause, fingers suspended in the air, searching for just the right term, the best expression, the coinage that will really fit…. and then it shows up in mental neon, and so you type it, smile in triumph, and lean back. It’s just the right words, a perfect terminology to fit the need.

If you’re fortunate, you reread it immediately (instead of later on, or maybe only after it’s published) and discover that this most excellent expression is… actually horribly wrong in its literary environment: anachronistic, out-of-place slang, etc.

C. P. Snow borrowed a French mot juste [“perfect word”] for this when speaking of the expectations of “people of our generation” when discussing the “two cultures” of literature and science. He accused them of being bien vieille (“well-aged). The implication was that those beliefs seemed normal to them in their lived experience, but that time does move along and changes concepts and expressions.

I sure do see it a lot of if these days, in a failure of editorial oversight. The Regency Romance heroine who muses that her inadequate suitor’s behavior “brought her down”. The 17’th century thief who finds that he’s “blown his cover”. The villain in the 18’th century who is “fueled by adrenalin.”

Now, I have a lot of sympathy for this particular mistake. In one sense, it really may be “the perfect phrase” for what they’re trying to express, a shortcut that truly sums up a concept. But, of course, it’s inadmissible in the usage, since the word or phrase itself is alien to the context of the story (chiefly as an anachronism, but also sometimes from the wrong culture, or in an impossible context.)

But, the thing is, these phrases will themselves age over time and acquire a patina of agelessness. If you are part of my generation, the three examples I gave above are familiar to you, since you were around to witness their birth, or the discovery of their context (adrenalin). So you know for yourself that they are misassigned when applied to an earlier time period. But if we move forward another 50 years, they may just seem to be older phrases in the common mouth, their birth time no longer noticed.

Got any noticeable expressions like this that you’ve employed or stumbled across in usage? If you use editors, better make sure that they’re “age appropriate”, so to speak.

4 responses to “Le Mot Juste”

  1. When reading present accounts of historical events, and historical fiction, describing the actions and situations in current terms doesn’t bother me. However, if they start using modern terms in their speech then I have an issue.

  2. “Got any noticeable expressions like this that you’ve employed or stumbled across in usage?”

    Just yesterday I used “Let’s toss his crib.” I can’t (be bothered) to find out if this is 1930s Film Noir slang or 1970s cop movie slang for “search his apartment.” AI slop says it could go all the way back to the 19th Century, so I ran with Film Noir because it’s cooler.

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    “Little bro has a pretty scary browser history,” remarked Elizabeth to the network. She was watching him from the roof of the Arts building and hacking his phone at the same time. “Spending a lot of time cruising unsavory web sites, sketchy forums, yeah. No wonder he ran. Oh, and he’s got a gun on him. It’s a Jennings .22. About the crappiest thing he could possibly have, and it’s rusty as well. Let’s toss his crib.”

    “Dibs!” shouted five different ninjas simultaneously. Some of them were getting a little bored with sneaking, since they weren’t allowed to trip anyone who wasn’t behaving badly.

    “Me!” shouted one of the girls, stretching an arm up as high as she could and bouncing on her toes. “Me me me!!! I wanna do it!”

    “Ladies, a moment of decorum if you please,” the Captain said, holding up a hand for quiet. “Elizabeth, we are not film noir detectives from some 1930s B movie. We will not be ‘tossing his crib’ today.” She spared a sternly raised eyebrow for the smirking ninja, who had said it for the sole purpose of winding the Captain up.

    “Aw,” sighed the assembled ninjas in disappointment.

    “He has a room in the dormitories,” she continued. “We’re going to infest it with surveillance ants and scan it from ceiling to floorboards.”

    “Yay!!” the ninjas crowed and high-fived each other.

    The Captain frowned darkly when she gave her next order. “Anyone who carries such a shoddy firearm must be up to no good. Be sure to disable that objectionable object, Elizabeth. It’s as likely to go off in his pocket as it is to fire when he pulls the trigger.”

    “Already done,” Elizabeth said with a grin.

    “A Jennings .22,” the Captain muttered, offended by the notion. “What’s the world coming to, I ask you?”

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    Little slang bits tossed into the conversation deliberately can be very funny (or so I presume, I think it’s funny anyway.) If your talking dog speaks with a Victorian vocabulary and the other character says something in 2026 ZoomerSpeak like “Well excuse me, doggo” that’s a giggle.

    If the Victorian says “doggo” that’s a mistake. Unless they’re doing it to confuse a Zoomer. Nammu Chen speaks like the heroine in a historical romance except when she sneaks in some slang to get George’s attention.

    1. OTOH, once you have your ear tuned to it, it never turns off. A woman in an early-morning/fantasy setting assures her family she will listen to the “professionals” and I wince. It’s not being paid that makes people worthy of regard in such an era.

  3. I tend to be hypersensitive to such things myself. It does not help my reading, but it helps my writing. A lot.

    The real mot juste is when you dig deeply and come up with a metaphor that not only expresses it perfectly but adds to the world-building.

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